Sapphic Heat Worksheet

Scene Audit

Worksheet 15

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Use after drafting a complete scene.

Quick Diagnosis

  • The scene is drafted, but you cannot tell whether it works.
  • The scene has strong moments, but the movement is unclear.
  • You need one revision target instead of ten vague worries.

Scene Audit

Scene purpose:
Wanted / withheld:
Primary obstacle / hidden obstacle:
Starting / ending / highest intensity:
Scene movement: opening, disturbance, shift, aftermath:
Unsaid sentence:
Power or boundary clarity issue:
Primary revision target:

Mini Example

Purpose: make denial harder.

Hidden obstacle: admitting care would undo the character’s public role.

Revision target: cut two explanatory paragraphs and let the final silence carry the turn.

Revision Check

  • The scene has a job beyond mood.
  • Want and withholding are both legible.
  • The scene changes power, knowledge, or vulnerability.
  • The primary revision target is specific.